this is awesome!! I like the sorta immersive narrator-- the customization is amazing as well, love the options for a middle name and how its pretty diverse. I love the characters so far and im absolutely WHIPPED for Jesse!!
So far I'm really liking it. It sucks you in and the customization was pretty fun. I did notice a few grammar mistakes like using "his" instead of "him" and places where you can see you were going to write something different but changed your mind but forgot to erase all of the sentence. I would suggest getting a proofreader, even if it is just a friend to read through it to help
Imagine being so focused on little details you put a focking MAP in a Twine game. More customizable than this you die. The cliffhanger looks promising.
Very promising start! The amount of customization options is very neat, and the nightmare sequence had a great atmosphere! Plus I love the neat things you're doing with the selectable text in the demo and how the words will change or the sound effects trigger. Fun!
I'd definitely recommend enlisting the help of a beta reader. I definitely noticed a few typos and they'll also be able to help out when the coding decides to be a butt and not give the right pronoun or give the right form of the pronoun.
I'm very interested in this and looking forward to its development!
This was a ton of fun!! I'm excited to see where this goes for sure, this is an INSANE amount of customization for the MC, I ended up googling like 20 different names of rocks so I could pick just the right color lmaoooo
Also, Jesse is adorable I love them so much 😭❤️ I will give them the world. Allie is shaping up to be endearing too, I feel bad that they're stuck watching over the 2 detectives who share 1 collective braincell 😭
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Is this not abandoned 🥹?
bruh it ends when the good shit is about to happen whyyyyyyy but I loved it keep up the amazing work on this story ^^
Awww please tell me this If still update ˚‧º·(˚ ˃̣̣̥⌓˂̣̣̥ )‧º·˚
this is awesome!! I like the sorta immersive narrator-- the customization is amazing as well, love the options for a middle name and how its pretty diverse. I love the characters so far and im absolutely WHIPPED for Jesse!!
Very interesting so far, I'm excited to see what happens next.
This is very neat, can't wait for more ^^
Ive only know jesse for a minute but i am ready to die for him at a moments notice
that was so good- can't wait for more~
THAT WAS SO COOL!!!!!! I loved it a lot :)))))
So far I'm really liking it. It sucks you in and the customization was pretty fun.
I did notice a few grammar mistakes like using "his" instead of "him" and places where you can see you were going to write something different but changed your mind but forgot to erase all of the sentence. I would suggest getting a proofreader, even if it is just a friend to read through it to help
This has been so awesome so far, keep up the good job :D
I love this! Very fun read ~ love the sound effects, and the sidebar!
I liked this! The level of customization was great
Imagine being so focused on little details you put a focking MAP in a Twine game. More customizable than this you die. The cliffhanger looks promising.
*slaps hand on the table*
MOAR.
I found it very hard to read with either theme. A minimalist option would be appreciated a lot.
Very promising start! The amount of customization options is very neat, and the nightmare sequence had a great atmosphere! Plus I love the neat things you're doing with the selectable text in the demo and how the words will change or the sound effects trigger. Fun!
I'd definitely recommend enlisting the help of a beta reader. I definitely noticed a few typos and they'll also be able to help out when the coding decides to be a butt and not give the right pronoun or give the right form of the pronoun.
I'm very interested in this and looking forward to its development!
Made an account just to say this was an awesome start to your game. Only noticed a few spelling errors but nothing extreme. Can't wait to see more (:
This was a ton of fun!! I'm excited to see where this goes for sure, this is an INSANE amount of customization for the MC, I ended up googling like 20 different names of rocks so I could pick just the right color lmaoooo
Also, Jesse is adorable I love them so much 😭❤️ I will give them the world. Allie is shaping up to be endearing too, I feel bad that they're stuck watching over the 2 detectives who share 1 collective braincell 😭